Throughout this great scheme of things you secure a B- for effort. Exactly where you lost me was first in the specifics. You know, as the maxim goes, the devil is in the details... And that couldn't be more true in this article. Having said that, let me say to you what did work. Your text can be highly powerful which is most likely the reason why I am taking the effort in order to opine. I do not really make it a regular habit of doing that. Secondly, while I can see the leaps in reasoning you come up with, I am not necessarily sure of just how you appear to unite your ideas which in turn make the conclusion. For now I shall yield to your issue but hope in the future you connect the dots better.